Thought I’d start dabbling a little more seriously (can you dabble “seriously”? Isn’t dabbling inherently unserious?) in the microfiction writing community. Soooo, based on a writing prompt from Madison Woods, here’s my first “100 Word” Friday Fictioneer entry:
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I pushed my way through the last of the trees and stopped, stunned by the lush, vibrant meadow stretched out before me like a fantastic tapestry, seemingly spun together out of bright, emerald-green thread on the gods’ great looms. A rainbow marked it to me as a good, holy place.
Garrick had said there would be a sign. That I would just know. Garrick wasn’t usually wrong about much; he wasn’t about this, either.
I knelt, like an acolyte before an altar, and dug a small hole, placing the urn gently in the earth. Head bowed, I could only whisper, “Goodbye, Mother.”
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#FridayFictioneers
This was a beautiful and touching story that almost brought tears to my eyes. (I’d call that a success re your foray into the 100 word format.) Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
Beautifully written, and a fabulous start to your ‘dabbling’ in micro-fiction. Please write again next week!
If you’d like to read ours, it’s linked here:
http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/a-cordello-memory
Aww. Just touching. So sad and so sweet. Nice job.
My attempt: https://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/fields-of-wildflowers/
If this is “dabbling” then feel free to continue dabbling away. This was a touching and very evocative story that appeals to the heart and the senses. Nice work indeed.
Oh yes! Please keep dabbling. Poignant story. Thank you for sharing it.
Oh, I LIKE this. Very good visual.
lovely imagery, the perfect place found for something so special….
Ow, this is so touching and I had tears in my eyes. You do have a way with words and your descriptions are so poignant and vivid. Keep on dabbling, gal. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-sinking-low/
So very poignant; dabble on. Great sense of place and occasion in this.
Mine’s at: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/pursuit-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/
And in that is the essence of flash fiction – something short and sweet that has a beginning, a middle and a satisfying conclusion too, well done.
Here’s mine for any who want to read it: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-god-plays-the-tom-toms/
I loved this! As a first try, it’s amazing. The word choices are very powerful and the imagery is terrific. Can’t wait till your next dabbling 🙂 http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/05/17/friday-fictioneers-2/
that was sweet and yes like Linda said, quite complete. Was a nice read.
Here’s mine: http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-head-tripping/ (I know you’ve read Ali’s already, thanks for stopping by!)
Your descriptions are mesmerising. I was totally taken into the scene and I loved “God’s great looms” in particular. A moving piece and a great introduction. Welcome to the Fictioneers!
I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fiction-the-lie-of-the-land/
Touching story. The first line is really superb!
http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/friday-fictioneers/
I second Elmo’s comment applauding “Gods great looms” Nicely crafted story. I look forward to reading more from you.
mine’s here http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/
A touching story you have!
Here’s mine….please feel free to check it out too: http://writeforacause.org/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-answered-prayer/
Very nice. A terrific first entry,.
Wonderful imagery, loved the descriptors! Welcome to Friday Fictioneers!
http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/17/friday-fictioneers-luck-of-the/
Here’s mine:
Well done! You’ve set the bar high with your first attempt.
My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/facade/
a very solemn act.
http://brainsnorts.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/friday-fictioneers-518-via-madison-woods/
Oh, how sweet and sad. Very nicely done.
You really saved my skin with this inifrmatoon. Thanks!