A Quiet Place To Rest

Thought I’d start dabbling a little more seriously (can you dabble “seriously”? Isn’t dabbling inherently unserious?) in the microfiction writing community.  Soooo, based on a writing prompt from Madison Woods, here’s my first “100 Word” Friday Fictioneer entry:


Friday FictioneersI pushed my way through the last of the trees and stopped, stunned by the lush, vibrant meadow stretched out before me like a fantastic tapestry, seemingly spun together out of bright, emerald-green thread on the gods’ great looms.  A rainbow marked it to me as a good, holy place.

Garrick had said there would be a sign.  That I would just know.  Garrick wasn’t usually wrong about much; he wasn’t about this, either.

I knelt, like an acolyte before an altar, and dug a small hole, placing the urn gently in the earth. Head bowed, I could only whisper, “Goodbye, Mother.”




22 thoughts on “A Quiet Place To Rest

  1. dmmacilroy says:

    This was a beautiful and touching story that almost brought tears to my eyes. (I’d call that a success re your foray into the 100 word format.) Well done.




  2. joannalazuliportals says:

    Beautifully written, and a fabulous start to your ‘dabbling’ in micro-fiction. Please write again next week!

    If you’d like to read ours, it’s linked here:

  3. TheOthers1 says:

    Aww. Just touching. So sad and so sweet. Nice job.

    My attempt: https://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/fields-of-wildflowers/

  4. If this is “dabbling” then feel free to continue dabbling away. This was a touching and very evocative story that appeals to the heart and the senses. Nice work indeed.

  5. rochellewisoff says:

    Oh yes! Please keep dabbling. Poignant story. Thank you for sharing it.

  6. lindarigsbee says:

    Oh, I LIKE this. Very good visual.

  7. flyoverhere says:

    lovely imagery, the perfect place found for something so special….

  8. Ow, this is so touching and I had tears in my eyes. You do have a way with words and your descriptions are so poignant and vivid. Keep on dabbling, gal. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-sinking-low/

  9. Sandra says:

    So very poignant; dabble on. Great sense of place and occasion in this.

    Mine’s at: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/pursuit-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

  10. Linda says:

    And in that is the essence of flash fiction – something short and sweet that has a beginning, a middle and a satisfying conclusion too, well done.

    Here’s mine for any who want to read it: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-god-plays-the-tom-toms/

  11. I loved this! As a first try, it’s amazing. The word choices are very powerful and the imagery is terrific. Can’t wait till your next dabbling 🙂 http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/05/17/friday-fictioneers-2/

  12. rainang says:

    that was sweet and yes like Linda said, quite complete. Was a nice read.

    Here’s mine: http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-head-tripping/ (I know you’ve read Ali’s already, thanks for stopping by!)

  13. elmowrites says:

    Your descriptions are mesmerising. I was totally taken into the scene and I loved “God’s great looms” in particular. A moving piece and a great introduction. Welcome to the Fictioneers!

    I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fiction-the-lie-of-the-land/

  14. rgayer55 says:

    I second Elmo’s comment applauding “Gods great looms” Nicely crafted story. I look forward to reading more from you.

    mine’s here http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

  15. jeninesilos says:

    A touching story you have!
    Here’s mine….please feel free to check it out too: http://writeforacause.org/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-answered-prayer/

  16. Very nice. A terrific first entry,.

  17. teschoenborn says:

    Wonderful imagery, loved the descriptors! Welcome to Friday Fictioneers!
    Here’s mine:

  18. Brandon Scott says:

    Well done! You’ve set the bar high with your first attempt.

    My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/facade/

  19. Kaitlin says:

    Oh, how sweet and sad. Very nicely done.

  20. Kaden says:

    You really saved my skin with this inifrmatoon. Thanks!

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